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Tuesday, March 11, 2014

Just when you thought you were safe

The dream or the room?
You get bit in the butt. 

'Revision' sounds like work so I'm thinking I didn't revise this. (Twice.) I just played around with it. What's better, more words, or less? You and me in the room, or an indefinite someone?

The Dream and the Room (2nd draft)


floatingfloatingfloating
this is the dream
or maybe the room
so empty so lovely
ceiling so high
we float
in a room full of story
we remember, or not;
against the sky
we bump our heads
frightened of possibilities
furious at limitations
angry enough to change
everything
angerispowerandcourage
kissing the sky goodbye
NOWWEFLY
still wondering
is this the dream,
or is this the room?


The Dream and the Room (3rd draft)


This is the dream
or maybe the room
full of story
remembered -- or not;
possibilities
limitations
anger power courage
awake
kiss the sky goodbye
fly and wonder
is this the dream,
or is this the room?


Well, come in, John.


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